Reflection on my first draft

My first draft was grammatically wrong firstly. And secondly, it does not contain all the factors of my group's scenes and is not detailed enough. I have changed many things about our scenes after I wrote the first draft. For example, lines definitely were added more, musics were also added to make the scenes not boring and to accomplish the scenes' purposes, and stage settings were changed. 

To improve my draft, I can add all the changes to make sure it has all things I did for the scenes, and that way, I can make IB graders imagine the scenes vividly. 

To be more specific about the changes, I added some musics to show the contrast of mood in scene 3.1. 3.1 is fighting scene which is really suspenseful and urgent, so I played the music that has a fast tempo and serious melody. However when Romeo comes out and speaks long and boring line, the relaxing music that sounds sleepy is turned on. It shows that it does not make sense in real life that saying ridiculously long line when it is seious and imminent situation. The adding of the musics helped my group make the scenes so much better. Our acting felt more comfortable with the musics so we could show the comedic aspect much easier than before.